Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing

[The Former DMiller]

Well, I got through the 2nd chapter and the site started having server problems, so I'll try to finish it up later. From what I read it was pretty interesting. Your descriptions of everything are really vivid, and it helps to picture the post-apocalyptic world you've created. My only criticism would be that there are a lot of grammatical errors, but you are still early in the writing process so those will pop up, but it can be very distracting from what seems to be an otherwise good story.