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    Great Rumbler
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    8th January 2006, 10:04 PM
    Quote:You fail at story telling.

    You haven't even read any of it! Actually, I'm probably just bad at describing what it is. It's different. I think.

    Quote:Yeah there's no point to it at all.

    Unless you were with that person for part of your life, say from birth to preteens and then taken away for some reason, then you would seek them out for good reason. But depending on the age of the character doing the seeking and the age of the character doing the hiding you could end up with an extremely lackluster encounter. Look at your own life from the past 10 years and see how much you've changed, then think of how much you've changed in 20.

    Suddenly the realism of meeting that person would be extremely unsettling, save for sharing the same memories of childhood, they will be two completely different people. Now that story in itself can be very interesting, one of self-discovery. But honestly, by itself, it's kinda boring.

    It needs a plot twist, something that changes the entire formula.

    There won't be any "quest" to find her parents, as they would already be dead, except up to the point where she finds that out. The reason I want to take that route is add a dynamic to the relationship between Kara and Aaron that wouldn't be there otherwise. Up until that point they've been together in the abadoned city for several months and are starting to become friends, despite Kara's earlier misgivings about it. Then, Kara finds out that her parents had been alive for years and Aaron is her brother. This of course alters their relationship and allows it to grow in a different direction. Kara is very self-sufficient, but basically drifting though life while Aaron is somewhat clumsy in the new world he's found himself in. The end result being that Kara's place in the world becomes that of a big sister to her little brother.

    It's certainly won't be spelled out like that in story, but you get the basic idea.
    Sometimes you get the scorpion.
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    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 4th January 2006, 5:59 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by lazyfatbum - 4th January 2006, 6:28 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 4th January 2006, 7:10 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by lazyfatbum - 5th January 2006, 7:53 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 5th January 2006, 8:14 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by The Former DMiller - 5th January 2006, 9:56 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 5th January 2006, 10:40 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by The Former DMiller - 5th January 2006, 1:45 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 5th January 2006, 3:17 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Dark Jaguar - 5th January 2006, 3:25 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 5th January 2006, 3:54 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by lazyfatbum - 5th January 2006, 6:44 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 5th January 2006, 7:33 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Darunia - 6th January 2006, 5:03 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 6th January 2006, 6:17 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Darunia - 8th January 2006, 7:18 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 8th January 2006, 7:39 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Dark Jaguar - 8th January 2006, 9:42 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 8th January 2006, 9:55 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by lazyfatbum - 8th January 2006, 9:55 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 8th January 2006, 10:04 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by lazyfatbum - 9th January 2006, 1:26 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 9th January 2006, 8:26 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Dark Jaguar - 9th January 2006, 11:13 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by lazyfatbum - 9th January 2006, 11:34 AM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 9th January 2006, 12:05 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 10th March 2006, 8:20 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Smoke - 10th March 2006, 8:37 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 10th March 2006, 8:48 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 17th March 2006, 7:04 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by The Former DMiller - 18th March 2006, 4:17 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 19th March 2006, 4:39 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by The Former DMiller - 24th March 2006, 3:11 PM
    Looking for a little advice with a story I'm writing - by Great Rumbler - 24th March 2006, 4:10 PM

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