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[alien space marine]

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[Unreadphilosophy]

It looks like the story will be pretty easy to follow.

[Weltall]

Esoteric!

[etoven]

It looks like the story will be pretty easy to follow.

[Unreadphilosophy]

I'm expecting a Pulitzer for this.

[lazyfatbum]

I love that movie, my favorite part is when they all get on the boat and go through the tunnel.

[alien space marine]

I'm expecting a Pulitzer for this.

I am better then Stephen King

[Darunia]

I have read your chapter and have some problems with it.

Firstly, I must draw attention to the central protagonist, Jack. While I believe that you succeed in developing your character throughout the first and second acts, the third act leaves many questions open. Secondly, I must criticize the pace of the chapter. It gets off to a dizzying pace, but really slows down in the middle. Again, the ending is rather untied, and needs a little work. I find myself still asking a lot of questions, like "what does Jack like to play?" and "if Jack is dull, why doesn't he get a hobby?" Besides that, I found several typos, and I found some material that seemed a bit racist... I suggest you remove that prior to attempting publication. Make these corrections and I believe I can sign you to a major contract.