19th December 2006, 8:15 PM
The Solar Trilympics, with SPACE CANDY!
I joke, but seriously there is one other major thing to consider here. You really don't want to go overboard with "futuring up" every aspect of your story. In a way, this goes directly against "a lot is going to change" but my point is just that a lot of readers may think (and possibly rightly so) that adding "spacey" terms to modern day stuff is a little cheesy. I don't want to be harsh, but it's something you should consider. The last thing you want is to add Jetson style rings to everything and call it "space tennis" or some such thing. Nothing is nearly like that, I'm just saying things are just a tad overboard in that revised paragraph in those terms. Just a suggestion, take it as you will.
I joke, but seriously there is one other major thing to consider here. You really don't want to go overboard with "futuring up" every aspect of your story. In a way, this goes directly against "a lot is going to change" but my point is just that a lot of readers may think (and possibly rightly so) that adding "spacey" terms to modern day stuff is a little cheesy. I don't want to be harsh, but it's something you should consider. The last thing you want is to add Jetson style rings to everything and call it "space tennis" or some such thing. Nothing is nearly like that, I'm just saying things are just a tad overboard in that revised paragraph in those terms. Just a suggestion, take it as you will.
"On two occasions, I have been asked [by members of Parliament], 'Pray, Mr. Babbage, if you put into the machine wrong figures, will the right answers come out?' I am not able to rightly apprehend the kind of confusion of ideas that could provoke such a question." ~ Charles Babbage (1791-1871)