• Login
  • Register
  • Login Register
    Login
    Username:
    Password:
  • Home
  • Members
  • Team
  • Help
User Links
  • Login
  • Register
  • Login Register
    Login
    Username:
    Password:

    Quick Links Home Members Team Help
    Tendo City Tendo City: Metropolitan District Ramble City Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler.

     
    • 0 Vote(s) - 0 Average
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler.
    Dark Jaguar
    Offline

    Administrator

    Posts: 19,628
    Threads: 1,572
    Joined: 10-12-1999
    #11
    19th December 2006, 8:15 PM
    The Solar Trilympics, with SPACE CANDY!

    I joke, but seriously there is one other major thing to consider here. You really don't want to go overboard with "futuring up" every aspect of your story. In a way, this goes directly against "a lot is going to change" but my point is just that a lot of readers may think (and possibly rightly so) that adding "spacey" terms to modern day stuff is a little cheesy. I don't want to be harsh, but it's something you should consider. The last thing you want is to add Jetson style rings to everything and call it "space tennis" or some such thing. Nothing is nearly like that, I'm just saying things are just a tad overboard in that revised paragraph in those terms. Just a suggestion, take it as you will.
    "On two occasions, I have been asked [by members of Parliament], 'Pray, Mr. Babbage, if you put into the machine wrong figures, will the right answers come out?' I am not able to rightly apprehend the kind of confusion of ideas that could provoke such a question." ~ Charles Babbage (1791-1871)
    Reply
    Reply
    « Next Oldest | Next Newest »

    Users browsing this thread:



    Messages In This Thread
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 17th December 2006, 7:41 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by DMiller - 18th December 2006, 2:50 AM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by EdenMaster - 18th December 2006, 9:34 AM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 18th December 2006, 10:48 AM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Weltall - 19th December 2006, 1:50 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 19th December 2006, 2:38 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 19th December 2006, 3:07 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 19th December 2006, 3:24 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 19th December 2006, 3:53 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 19th December 2006, 8:04 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 19th December 2006, 8:15 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 19th December 2006, 8:27 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 19th December 2006, 8:33 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 19th December 2006, 8:48 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 19th December 2006, 9:04 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 19th December 2006, 9:53 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 19th December 2006, 11:12 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Weltall - 20th December 2006, 2:10 AM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 20th December 2006, 7:38 AM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 20th December 2006, 2:09 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 21st December 2006, 12:56 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 21st December 2006, 1:31 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Great Rumbler - 21st December 2006, 1:47 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by Dark Jaguar - 21st December 2006, 2:39 PM
    Alright, sea monkeys, it's time to help Great Rumbler. - by A Black Falcon - 21st December 2006, 4:34 PM

    • View a Printable Version
    • Subscribe to this thread
    Forum Jump:

    Toven Solutions

    Home · Members · Team · Help · Contact

    408 Chapman St. Salem, Viriginia

    +1 540 4276896

    etoven@gmail.com

    About the company Lorem ipsum dolor sit amet, consectetur adipiscing elit, sed do eiusmod tempor incididunt ut labore et dolore magna aliqua.

    Linear Mode
    Threaded Mode